When is it toooo clever?
Clear vs. Clever: The famous copywriting dilemma
Welcome to the 29th issue of Write On!
The newsletter that’s desperately hanging on to its late 20s (been there my friend 🥲).
Estimated read time: 2 minutes 54 seconds
Monk Mode Results:
I'm going into monk mode this weekend.
• Gf is out of town.
• No plans.
Just two days of intense focus building my course.
Goal is to have the MVP done and ready to show to beta students.
Might be a stretch. But we'll see.
ready. set. go.
— Joe Portsmouth 🧲 (@joe_portsmouth)
Aug 5, 2023
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50% of the video recordings ✅
5 notion workbook resources ✅
300+ practice golf swings ✅
2 meals including pizza ✅
3.5 mile run ✅
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Genius or Too Clever?
One of your fellow Write On subscribers shared this ad with me over the weekend, and it got me thinking…
What is the line between marketing genius and trying to be too clever?
Here’s the ad in question:
I had some initial thoughts but was curious what others on Twitter and LinkedIn would say.
So I posted on both platforms asking: “What would you rate this Patagonia ad on a scale of 1-10 (with 10 being the best)?”
It was pretty funny to see how different the reactions were by platform.
LinkedIn was overwhelmingly positive with a lot of 10s given out.
Twitter was much more pessimistic (with some positive reviews sprinkled in).
Let’s break down this ad together and see where we net out:
Category #1: Creativity
The creativity for this ad is off the charts - no doubt.
I couldn’t help but think: “Wow, that’s unique.”
That’s a feeling people won’t forget. The wow-factor.
But that’s only if they read the whole ad.
Which brings us to category #2…
Category #2: Clarity
I don’t know about you, but I had to reread this ad a few times before it fully registered.
That could be a good or bad thing depending on how you look at it.
Good - because it’s really forcing the reader to think and absorb what is being said in the ad.
Bad - because it probably loses a lot of people’s attention by being too complex to understand.
It basically reads like a long, run-on sentence. Not ideal.
So we’ve got mixed reviews on clarity.
On to the final category…
Category #3: Feeling
Like I mentioned earlier, the feedback was mixed on Twitter vs. LinkedIn.
Some loved it. Some hated it.
And I think that’s a great thing.
Because that’s a sign that Patagonia took a stance.
Not necessarily with the message (although they are speaking in an authoritative tone). But because they made people pick a side.
This is either for you, or it’s not.
If you read the ad, like the creativity, and resonate with the message, there’s a good chance you become an instant fan of Patagonia.
Because this is a campaign that shows the reader that Patagonia is way more than just an outdoor clothing brand.
FInal Overall Score: 8/10
That’s all for this week. Thanks for reading.
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